Critique Request Beginner level scroll design attempt

[TDPurcell]

I’m looking for some feedback on how i can improve on my scroll design. Thanks. (Procreate drawings).

 

[John B.]

Looks pretty good for early work and will smooth out with more study and experience.
Just study some of the great scroll artists for the subtle refinements.
Keep on drawing and posting, you are on the right track

 

[TDPurcell]

Looks pretty good for early work and will smooth out with more study and experience.
Just study some of the great scroll artists for the subtle refinements.
Keep on drawing and posting, you are on the right track

Thank you for the feedback.

 

[monk]

the spine needs more attention. flat spots and bumps are to be avoided. the cutting is somewhat better than your design. a bit more pencil, a bit less graver will reward your efforts. jmho

 

[TDPurcell]

the spine needs more attention. flat spots and bumps are to be avoided. the cutting is somewhat better than your design. a bit more pencil, a bit less graver will reward your efforts. jmho

Thanks

 

[Goldjockey]

Structure is well defined and pleasing, and shading concept is solid, and would benefit from refinement of your technique. Leaves and elements need to reach out and affirmatively touch the border, providing a solid sense of 'anchoring' and shared continuity, otherwise a scroll drawn inside a border looks sort of like seaweed floating around inside an aquarium.

 

[TDPurcell]

Structure is well defined and pleasing, and shading concept is solid, and would benefit from refinement of your technique. Leaves and elements need to reach out and affirmatively touch the border, providing a solid sense of 'anchoring' and shared continuity, otherwise a scroll drawn inside a border looks sort of like seaweed floating around inside an aquarium.

Great advice. Thank you.

 

[Matthew Evans]

If you are looking for tricks, step one is to get the dog legs and flats out of the backbone of the spiral. Fun trick to get out of tunnel vision is to use a single layer for the backbone and flip the drawing to check for accuracy. Using separate layers can really make the errors stand out. Keep it up though.

 

[John B.]

Also, your first scroll originating from the flower is smaller than your second scroll.
That is a no-no.
As in nature, scrolls should generally decline in size as they grow from one another.
They can maintain the same size sometimes, but not grow bigger

 

[TDPurcell]

If you are looking for tricks, step one is to get the dog legs and flats out of the backbone of the spiral. Fun trick to get out of tunnel vision is to use a single layer for the backbone and flip the drawing to check for accuracy. Using separate layers can really make the errors stand out. Keep it up though.

interesting. I’m going to try that. Thanks.

 

[TDPurcell]

Also, your first scroll originating from the flower is smaller than your second scroll.
That is a no-no.
As in nature, scrolls should generally decline in size as they grow from one another.
They can maintain the same size sometimes, but not grow bigger

Yes, i see that now. It stands out like a sore thumb now that i see it. Thank you for the tip.