Critique Request Drawing more advanced scrollwork attempt.

[Dani Girl]

Hi cafe friends.

I would love the critique, tips and thoughts that are so kindly shared on this wonderful cafe.

This could possibly be OK for a folding knife I made with some friends on my holiday.

Sorry can someone link it properly... on my phone on holiday

Danae

https://m.facebook.com/engravingbyd...otif_id=1462878788949578&ref=m_notif&refid=48

 

[diandwill]

 

[Mark Knapp]

Very pretty, I'd love to see it in steel.

 

[Patrice Lemee]

Like I said before, I am not experienced enough to say anything beside it looks beautiful to me. I particularly love the little squiggly lines (technical term I am sure ) at the end of some scrolls. Can't remember having seen that before.
Like Mark said, I would love to see it on the knife.

 

[Roger Bleile]

I particularly love the little squiggly lines (technical term I am sure ) at the end of some scrolls.

They are called tendrils

 

[Patrice Lemee]

Thanks Roger.

 

[diandwill]

Just so everyone knows...this is the drawing that Danae wanted re-posted. It is beautiful, but isn't mine.

 

[Omar Haltam]

looks very nice, and well executed... it would be nice to see it on steel

 

[Jan Hendrik]

I like the design a lot! It has good flow and balance to my eye. I see some influence from Steve Lindsay in there as well.
Overall good job!

 

[sam]

It's beautiful and very well done. Practice makes perfect and your practice is paying off really well.

 

[Dani Girl]

Thanks. I was keen to see how it would be viewed by other trained eyes.

 

[Marcus Hunt]

Dani, what follows is a constructive criticism (I get the feeling you're after feedback on this design and not 'Attaboys).

Cross hatching needs to be done for a specific reason e.g. to darken the area where shading goes under a leaf. There are three schools of thought on this; one says "Don't crosshatch", the other two keep cross hatch lines evenly spaced and the other make the crosshatch lines closer to make the shading blacker. I'm of the last school of thought. Your crosshatch lines do nothing to enhance your design, in fact I think it spoils it especially as it goes right along some of the scrolls.

Also, one of your leaves between the third and last scrolls stretches and straightens too much and it draws my eye straight away as it sticks out like a sore thumb.

Personally, I don't care for this design. To me it's just too busy with no really defined backbone or clean lines. I see where you're going and you definitely have cutting skills and ability. My advice is don't try to reinvent the wheel. Good strong, clean design is better in my opinion. From your work I've seen on knives, etc., I think you have the potential to be a really good engraver.